Authors Note:
(Note: It is recommended for readers to read this. It's a quite important note)
Dear avid readers (Should there be in the first place),
It's been a while since I had commented on a chapter. There are a few things I need to mention:
To start off, I know its been frustrating how I constantly delete my novel so that I can reapply for a contract. Its been around 2 times (I think), and this is the third time I am applying for a contract, so sorry everyone.
I would like to mention to those that are either seniors, read a lot of novels before, or are quite perceptive, that since the scene of Maria and the MC, I had reduced psychological explanations, internal monologues and dialogues, and internal struggles. Perhaps you've noticed other things, and I wanted to explain the reason.
In short terms, I would like to mention that until around 10 chapters later, the real story will not start, where the juicy stuff comes up. The chapters until now are like an introduction to what will occur in the future.
I don't know how many have noticed, but it seems the dialogue is a bit 'general' and may be over simplified (or not, i'm not sure so just asking lol), and the reactions and dialogue... well i'm working on it. I'm still a beginner so I'm learning every day.
As for descriptions... I heard from a good old author that the descriptions are best left a bit vague so that readers can imagine, but not so sure. so please rate the novel until now and give me feedback on it. I need feedback to improve.
If your waiting for the juicy stuff-- the long, detailed dialogues, better vocabulary, descriptions, internal monologues, dialogues, explanations, different topics explored, mystical stuff, r-18, fantasy, dark, comedy, and other things, wait a few more chapters and you'll have it.
So I need feedback. Really. A lot.
If you noticed, I tried to change my method in writing a bit, from the over descriptive and info dumps (at the beginning) to more fragment sentences (later), so I would appreciate feedback which one you think is better.
Without feedback, I can't know what my dear, avid readers want!
I don't have that much time to write since I have around a two hours to write everyday due to my commitments, but I try my best.
In the future, expect more writing time, better explanations and descriptions.
And of course, I won't forget to thank anyone who is still continuing to read my humble novel.
Just kidding. My novel is the best.
From a unnarcissistic (narcissistic ), unselfish (selfish), magnanimous, evil, prideful, courteous, and dignified psychopathic author,
- ItismeindeedsoObey
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ZZsssssssst.....
The sound slowly became clearer and clearer, but because of everyone's focus on the pounding door and the bullets and explosions ringing, the sound was swallowed.
Only Yuuta heard the sound clearly, before a smile made its way across his face.
Dietrich who saw his expression was flabbergasted.
'Has he gone crazy after everything that happened? Well, in the end he's still a young man who was thrown into this accursed world. Its not really his fault-hm..?'
Upon focusing, Dietrich heard the odd sound as well and raised an eyebrow at it.
'What is that?'
Before he could gather his thoughts, the sound of something cutting through the air made its way into everyone's ears.
'This is....'
THWHOOSH..
The long and cylinder like thing with a cone flew, and flew and flew....
and made contact with the area with the car cops.
—KRAKOOM!
The whole area was obliterated under the power of an AGM-114 Hellfire missile launched from a Boeing ah-64 apache helicopter.
The shockwave destroyed the glass and shook the whole room as if it were going to collapse, sending Santiago flying and hitting his head on the metal door.
His head started bleeding and he immediately lost consciousness due to a violent concussion.
Mikhail, who was shot in the stomach, dragged himself behind a couch and spat a mouthful of blood. A bullet shot to where he once was, and cold sweat accumulated on his back.
It was getting cold.
The helicopter quickly started shooting 30×113mm B bullets, enough to turn even a full metal armored man into nothing more than cooked Jokbal.
(A/N: Jokbal is a korean dish)
The helicopter started raining bullets on everything, destroying everything in the vicinity and obliterating any signs of human life in the area.
Quickly the helicopter made its way to the shattered window.
"Now! Go to the helicopter and take them with you! Its your sisters orders"
Quickly, Dietrich without a hint of hesitation went and carried Mikhail on a shoulder and the unconscious Santiago on another.
Mikhail was too tired to retort and quickly surrendered to the need of sleeping deeply.
Although Dietrich looked a bit thin, and had the impression of being a four-eyes with his glasses, his strength was no joke.
Hearing Yuuta's words, he quickly made his way to the ladder that dangled out of the helicopter and professionally climbed up with the two on his shoulders like a monkey. In the helicopter, a man who wore a helmet and polyester-like black mask that hid his lower face helped Dietrich with the two people slumped over his shoulders.
"Young miss, our priority is taking you home now! Quickly come!"
Ekidna ignored him and held Yuuta's hands and pulled him towards the helicopter that was about take off. Walking with her, Yuuta took one last look at the door that was about to be destroyed and shook his head with a bitter smile, walking with her towards the helicopter.
Ekidna first climbed the ladders and then she gave Yuuta her hands to hold them and follow her up. However, contrary to her expectations, Yuuta pushed her up, as the man with the mask caught her.
"Yuuta?" Ekidna's eyes shook in shock.
"What are you doing? This isn't the time to be joking! Come here quickly, the door is a bout to break!" She laughed awkwardly and gave her hand once more to Yuuta.
Turning his back to her, Yuuta walked back into the room with the same bitter smile.
"Yuuta, you can't do this! Come back quickly! Now! This is an order, now!"
She grew desperate as Yuuta walked back to the room and grabbed a chair and sat.
"I have something to do"
In reality Yuuta had something he really needed to do.
How could he just let an interesting scenario go just like that? Impossible!
Yuuta's every move was calculated. He needed her affection, and this was the best way for him to do so.
For her to hate and love him at the same time.
To create an obsession.
"Miss, we can't stay here any longer! The helicopter is getting shot by bullets and our ammo is running out!"
"Niki shut up!"
She screamed and tears streamed down her face.
Ignoring her fuss and in fear of her doing anything crazy, Niki sighed and took out handcuffs before placing them on her hands. She turned in shock to him.
"Niki! What are you doing? Take these off now !!"
"I'm sorry young miss, but your older sister gave orders of returning you home in one piece. Anything else doesn't matter."
Quickly giving orders to the helicopter captain, the helicopter started to fly away.
"Yuuta! Yuuuutaaaa, nooo! Nonono!"
She screamed and sobbed as she tried to jump off the helicopter, but with a swift movement Dietrich back chopped her neck, making her lose consciousness instantly before handing her body to Niki gently who took of his hat in 'Thank you'
He looked back to the distancing building before he closed his eyes.
'Olympia, if its you, then you know what you are doing'
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The door finally broke down.
As Mark and his men entered the room, the weight of the moment settled upon them.
They surrounded the room, weapons drawn, as Mark's eyes scanned the young man who was sitting nonchantedly on the chair with his legs on the table, eyes closed, hands behind his head, and chair leaning to the back..
He was sitting at the far end of the table, a picture of nonchalance despite the armed men who encircled him.
Colonel Mark took a step forward, his voice steady and authoritative. "Yuuta," he said
"You're surrounded. Surrender now, and no one else has to get hurt."
For a brief moment, silence fell over the room. Yuuta's lips curled into a slow, sinister grin, one that sent a chill down the spines of even the most hardened criminals in the room.
"You are...."
Then grin on his face stood there for a while before it dissolved into a frown of confusion.
"Wait.. who were you again?"